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shan8006

原帖由 3WU 于 11-1-2011 18:22 发表

                               
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你说的对，建议考试无论有多紧张，也要花时间列提纲， 不能像 盲头苍蝇，匆匆下笔。万一一时想不到观点便要赶着下笔，留着空格最后还是能填补上的。首段要得就是几个关键词/词组。

是的，我也觉得虽然要花点时间在列提纲上，但它大大缩短了写作时间，而且首先确定了思路还能帮助做到首尾呼应。

sevennior

进步很快啊！！！佩服楼主毅力啊！！！

浮云云艾米莉

原帖由 shan8006 于 11-1-2011 19:17 发表

                               
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这篇题目我用了以前曾写过的一个，第二次答题感觉流畅多了，写出来后和以前对比简直像两个人写的，而且只花了我三十几分钟，然后检查，控制在四十分钟里。若现在参加考试的话，这篇应该也就是真实的水平了。继续加油 ...

177楼的文章。
话说确实很有进步了。思路也清晰了很多。加油！

                               
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narcsity

谢谢闪动！
我弄了本朗文现代字典，下班后就查《十天》上那些“热词”还有Economist上留下的生词，记录在小本子上，来回公交车上反复看。我觉得这个效果不错。吃饭的时候看ICS的节目，给自己营造一个英文环境。我相信大家都会实现自己的梦想的。加油！！

shan8006

要是考试时遇见这题目，估计要糊一片了，仔细领会题目的意思，太变态了，谁出的题目，不多说，大家看吧。
The twenty-fourth essay

University students are more focus on specialistic subjects in nowadays. Some people think universities should encourage students to study at a range of subjects in addition to special area. Do you agree?

Answer:

In this day and age, as undergraduates are attaching importance to their professional major
, some people start to argue that students should be encouraged to study diverse subjects but particular ones. In my view, even though studying diverse subjects seems like to bring
some benefits for students but national development need more experts. Because of that, I disagree.

First and foremost, put students to study professionally is a main approach to allow a nation to cultivate experts. Undoubtedly, undergraduates will acquire professional knowledge effectively from their specialised education during school time. Subsequently, after they graduate, they will rapidly adjust themselves to the career related their majors ,and they are gradually becoming professional experts via accumulating work experience. At the meantime, the experts for various area have been on great demands by the national development.

By contrast, graduates could be same and ordinary if they study diverse subjects at universities. Every subject is equally important in undergraduates' school days. As a consequence, there are might no students excellent to a profession because they have no enough time and concentration to master a subject. It is terrible that a nation has same people and no expert to developing.

However, graduates study diverse subjects properly would make them versatile. Those subjects will expand their outlook and endue them with well-rounded knowledge. Furthermore, they will adapt quickly to various occupational areas. But, it might be a sort of waste as no one can do different jobs at the same time.

Summarily, in my opinion, because the reasons I mentioned above,I disagree with that students should be encourage to study diverse subjects instead of profession.

shan8006

原帖由 sevennior 于 12-1-2011 00:37 发表

                               
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进步很快啊！！！佩服楼主毅力啊！！！

都是靠大家的帮助啊

shan8006

原帖由 EmilyS 于 12-1-2011 03:08 发表

                               
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177楼的文章。
话说确实很有进步了。思路也清晰了很多。加油！

太给力了，谢谢！
whether的用法原来还有这层讲究。
还有ads是不是口语表达了？
Thanks for you time

shan8006

原帖由 narcsity 于 12-1-2011 15:43 发表

                               
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谢谢闪动！
我弄了本朗文现代字典，下班后就查《十天》上那些“热词”还有Economist上留下的生词，记录在小本子上，来回公交车上反复看。我觉得这个效果不错。吃饭的时候看ICS的节目，给自己营造一个英文环境。我相 ...

是的，我以前也听说过临考前要营造英文环境，还有用英文思考问题，要是和别人说话当然得用中文，但英文在脑子里过一遍。
加油！

shan8006

The twenty-fifth essay

Nowadays, some organizations and charities publicize their activities by introducing special days every year like National Children's Day and Non-smoking Day. Why do they introduce special days and what effects does this have?

Answer:

Currently, as human societies are developing rapidly on various areas, some negative phenomena have occurred. Therefore, some organizations and charities start to disseminate their special days such as National Children's Day, Non-smoking Day, No Car Day and so forth.

Undoubtedly, The sake of The special days introduced by organizations and charities is to correct negative social behavior. For instance, introducing National Children's Day as well as Women's day is in order to reduce the phenomena of abusing children and women. Likewise, every people knows that smoking can harm human health not only smokers but also persons around them, for improving, Non-smoking Day advocate that there are no people smoke at that day. Additionally, "In town, without my car" that was been claim by some french youngsters. Subsequently, No Car Day was been found for the benefit of making the cities disturbed by cars revert to quiet and reducing poisonous gas charged by vehicles.

However, the effects which institutions expected via special days are always limited. More precisely, those might just have positive effects on special days. Because those are not compulsive policies and just take effect by public consciousness and public opinion. For instance, ones smoke on Non-smoking Day that could condemned by othe people, but if them disregard other's condemnation and continue to smoke, so public have no rights to deter their behaviour but continue to condemn. Similarly, There are maybe less car running on No Car Day, but the count of autos will return to normal at the next day. Nonetheless, it is important that to boost public awareness of correcting these negative societal behaviour.

Summarily, In my opinion, organization and charities introduce the special days in order to correct negative social hevaviour. While the effects are limited, but those special day always play an important role in public awareness increasing.

icewd

比起楼主来，自己实是太懒了
写了篇大学教育的，楼主昨天的命题。写之前查阅了一下economist，收集了些素材，有些句子自己也无甚把握，望指正
eg.1 in order for more people to benefit from the education, be it completing higher education 这里的be it completing...是什么个用法？
eg.2 those who are willing to persuade a post graduate studies or start career in academia for which wild range of knowledge might be an asset. 这里的for which可不可以这样用？

题目：
University students are more focus on specialistic subjects in nowadays. Some people think universities should encourage students to study at a range of subjects in addition to special area. Do you agree?

正文：
For a subject arouses such strong passions, "university education" is always difficult to pin down. For students' perspective, embarking on collage study for several years would be worth if the market rewards the skills they learnt. Thus, I am in favour of that a more specialized course schedule indeed benefits graduate's professional career.

The concept sounds simple enough: a more market-oriented higher education system can do much better than state-dominated model. The high premium to skilled labour results from the higher education not providing enough skilled labour to keep up with the demand technology created. That may explain why many technical undergraduate courses have been compressed from four years to three years such as engineering and informatics. Actually, spending time and efforts on a range of subjects is not really advantageous, back to thirty years ago, Wall Street firms realized that some physicists could work out differential equations and recruited them to become analysts and traders.

Admittedly, a wild range of subjects can also bring merits to some of the degree followers. For example, being an architect the related knowledge of history and a sensitive sense in arts are definitely helpful; and it would be hard to believe that an economist had no idea about industries and politics. Further, those who are willing to pursuit post-graduate studies or start career in academia for which wild range of knowledge might be an asset.

To sum up, in order for more people to benefit from the education, be it completing higher education, universities need to focus on providing specialistic subjects and supply the skills the market rewards.

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shan8006

原帖由 icewd 于 14-1-2011 01:08 发表

                               
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eg.1 in order for more people to benefit from the education, be it completing higher education 这里的be it completing...是什么个用法？
eg.2 those who are willing to persuade a post graduate studies or start career in academia for which wild range of knowledge might be an asset. 这里的for which可不可以这样用？

题目：
University students are more focus on specialistic subjects in nowadays. Some people think universities should encourage students to study at a range of subjects in addition to special area. Do you agree?

正文：
For a subject arouses such strong passions, "university education" is always difficult to pin down. For students' perspective, embarking on collage study for several years would be worth if the market rewards the skills they learnt. Thus, I am in favour of that a more specialized course schedule indeed benefits graduate's professional career.

The concept sounds simple enough: a more market-oriented higher education system can do much better than state-dominated model. The high premium to skilled labour results from the higher education not providing enough skilled labour to keep up with the demand technology created. That may explain why many technical undergraduate courses have been compressed from four years to three years such as engineering and informatics. Actually, spending time and efforts on a range of subjects is not really advantageous, back to thirty years ago, Wall Street firms realized that some physicists could work out differential equations and recruited them to become analysts and traders.

Admittedly, a wild range of subjects can also bring merits to some of the degree followers. For example, being an architect the related knowledge of history and a sensitive sense in arts are definitely helpful; and it would be hard to believe that an economist had no idea about industries and politics. Further, those who are willing to pursuit post-graduate studies or start career in academia for which wild range of knowledge might be an asset.

To sum up, in order for more people to benefit from the education, be it completing higher education, universities need to focus on providing specialistic subjects and supply the skills the market rewards.

首先，在写这个题目是我就发觉了一个问题，所以说这题目会变态。因为题目中的in addition to有除。。以外的意思，也有加上的意思。一旦领会错误，文章就完全可能写成相反的意思而跑题到天花板。
我选择了除外的意思，你选择了附加的意思。不知道谁对，我也没有把握。

eg1. be it completing higher education  查了很多资料。Be it....中的 be 是古英语虚拟语气的遗留形式.Be it 是谓语提前的倒装用法．it 是形式主语. 这里不指代具体某个词, 某件事．这里 Be it 可译为: (正)是(由于, 因为)，不知道是否正确。

eg2. 爱莫能助

不愧为6分的底子，是篇好作文。就看咋俩是谁掉进题目的陷阱里去了。

浮云云艾米莉

原帖由 shan8006 于 12-1-2011 20:27 发表

                               
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要是考试时遇见这题目，估计要糊一片了，仔细领会题目的意思，太变态了，谁出的题目，不多说，大家看吧。
The twenty-fourth essay

University students are more focus on specialistic subjects in nowadays.  ...

几个地方逻辑不清，而且对题目的理解似乎有误。问的是对于学各种科目和专门单一的科目之间的利弊,和开头的professional major还是有很大的区别的。specialized 不一定是professional.

                               
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浮云云艾米莉

原帖由 shan8006 于 13-1-2011 17:02 发表

                               
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The twenty-fifth essay

Nowadays, some organizations and charities publicize their activities by introducing special days every year like National Children's Day and Non-smoking Day. Why do they int ...

这篇逻辑上还是可以的，但是语法细节错的太多了。。。

                               
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claire8328

好巧啊，跟你是同一天考试的。
我的基础不好，但是看到楼主的方法是不错的。我感觉练雅思其实不在量多，而在质。还有一点，是我最近的心得：看完英文文章后，你要真正明白文章里面的意思，而不是相当然自己以为是的意思。我想英语中有很多idiomatic expressions,collocation and grammatical sentences.做为母语不是英语的人而言，如果不知道意思很容易错误的理解。我的老师曾经说过，“garbage in, garbage out"

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shan8006

晕了 ，问了我的英文老师，原来是我对第二十四篇题目理解有误，重新写一遍 。
The twenty-sixth essay

University students are more focus on specialistic subjects in nowadays. Some people think universities should encourage students to study at a range of subjects in addition to special area. Do you agree?

Answer:

As versatile human resources are increasingly heavy demanded for national development in this day and age, people start to argue that universities should encourage students study not only specialistic subjects but also other range of subjects. Undoubtedly, students study a range of subjects is certainly beneficial to them and helpfully promotes the national development as well.

First and foremost, undergraduates study diverse subjects in particular some subjects related their major will enable them rapidly adjust themselves to their career in the future. Via participating those diverse courses, students will acquire abundant useful knowledge related their major. Likewise, attending academic courses will strengthen their academic foundations and allow them to study more deeply on their special areas. As a consequence, they will have sufficient capabilities to adapt quickly to their career in the future.

Additionally, learning a range of subjects would make students versatile. Indeed, various courses are including diverse knowledge on different areas. Similarly, students will expand their outlook through learn those courses. As nowadays there are always heavy demands for versatile human resources by enterprises, students who well-rounded would be superior to their peers to win the decent positions.

However, undergraduates might not attach importance to their major when they study diversity. Because students have not enough time to take many classes during their school days, they could choose some classes they preferred and disregard their major. But that might not be reality, as currently qualifications have been important to graduates to seek jobs.

Summarily, In my point of view, because of reasons I mentioned above, I agree with that universities should encourage undergraduates to study diverse subjects besides professional area.

shan8006

原帖由 EmilyS 于 14-1-2011 02:41 发表

几个地方逻辑不清，而且对题目的理解似乎有误。问的是对于学各种科目和专门单一的科目之间的利弊,和开头的professional major还是有很大的区别的。specialized 不一定是professional.

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唉，真的是，以前光背单词，只懂得同义词替换，原来也不是说换就能换的。
万分感谢

shan8006

原帖由 EmilyS 于 14-1-2011 03:19 发表

这篇逻辑上还是可以的，但是语法细节错的太多了。。。

感觉语法问题写着写着就。。。深恶痛绝啊。
那个汗，还是需要恶补。

shan8006

原帖由 claire8328 于 14-1-2011 12:06 发表

                               
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好巧啊，跟你是同一天考试的。
我的基础不好，但是看到楼主的方法是不错的。我感觉练雅思其实不在量多，而在质。还有一点，是我最近的心得：看完英文文章后，你要真正明白文章里面的意思，而不是相当然自己以为是的 ...

好像是哦，我好像自认为理解了，但其实还可能没完全理解。
garbage in, garbage out说的很有道理。

浮云云艾米莉

原帖由 shan8006 于 15-1-2011 02:04 发表

                               
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感觉语法问题写着写着就。。。深恶痛绝啊。
那个汗，还是需要恶补。

多看看别人写的文章～新闻啊什么的～

xiaoping410

原帖由 EmilyS 于 14-1-2011 03:19 发表

                               
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这篇逻辑上还是可以的，但是语法细节错的太多了。。。

                               
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emily好热心啊，每天都花时间给人改作文儿~~~还有，超级佩服羡慕嫉妒你考4个8。。。

浮云云艾米莉

原帖由 xiaoping410 于 15-1-2011 03:21 发表

                               
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emily好热心啊，每天都花时间给人改作文儿~~~还有，超级佩服羡慕嫉妒你考4个8。。。

呵呵，谢谢。其实改改也就5分钟的事情。

积累最重要啊～当然临时冲击也是很必要的～大家一起努力啊！

shan8006

原帖由 EmilyS 于 15-1-2011 02:53 发表

                               
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多看看别人写的文章～新闻啊什么的～

明白了，还是需要慢慢来啊。

shan8006

原帖由 xiaoping410 于 15-1-2011 03:21 发表emily好热心啊，每天都花时间给人改作文儿~~~还有，超级佩服羡慕嫉妒你考4个8。。。

强烈赞同

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shan8006

第一次写学术性小作文，真不习惯。但感觉比书信好多了，基本上不用动那么多脑子。
相信多写几篇，掌握用词了一定比书信用时少。
The twenty-seventh is reporting

The graphs below indicate the effect of treatment in two type of cancer in females.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Answer:

The line graphs show the treatment effect in two type female cancer —— Alimentary tract cancer and Lymphosarcoma.

According to the Alimentary tract cancer (female), there was two main line in the graph: Cases without treatment and Cases with treatment, and proportion of surviving line indicated all dipped as the augment of years from diagnosis. More specifically, at first there were 100% surviving cases with treatment and around 85% surviving cases without treatment. After one year, surviving cases without treatment plunged to aroung 35% but cases with treatment just declined to around 70%. Eventually, they guadual stabilised at around 20% and around 45% respectively at 3 years from diagnosis.

As shown in the Lymphosarcoma (female), like Alimentary tract cancer, percentage of both surviving line trend to declined as well. They all start at 100% and all plummet to around 30% after more than a year. But the surviving cases with treatment consistently dipped until to 0% at 5 years from diagnosis, while surviving cases without treatment trend to stabilised to 25% at about two and a half years.

Therefore, it can be clearly seen from two line graphs that cancerous persons who without treatment have similar survival rate curve and almost trend to stable after about two and a half years.

neverfree

我也不是很确定，试着回答下。

eg.1 in order for more people to benefit from the education, be it completing higher education 这里的be it completing...是什么个用法？
这个好像是倒装句， it should be 改成了  should be it ,  然后 should 省略了

eg.2 those who are willing to persuade a post graduate studies or start career in academia for which wild range of knowledge might be an asset. 这里的for which可不可以这样用？
knowledge might be an asset for which（which指代前面整个句子，那些想要读研或在学院教书人，这种情况下），然后 for which 提前
另外，persuade可以这么用吗? 我怎么觉得应该用 pursue，  还有 为何是 a postgraduate studies， start career 为何不是 start careers ?
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我随便回的，不确定。 还是要请Emily 老师来解释。

shan8006

The twenty-eighth essay 1月15日考试A类大作文。

some workplaces tend to a equal number of women and men.
do you think it is positive or negative for the social development？

Answer:

Currently, as increasing workplaces start to keep a balanced number of female employees and male employees, some people argue whether it is a positive societal development or not. In contrast, females certainly own some inherent advantages than male; and giving women employment opportunities equals men's which reflects gender equality as well. Because of those, in my opinion, this is a positive social development.

Fist and foremost, keeping a equal number of female employees and male employees would allow more females to participate jobs. Undoubtedly, workplaces will demand more female employees; these vacant positions enable more women to start their career. As a consequence, they can fairly compete with men instead of tying down by household chores at home. In terms of companies, they would gain their female employees' admiration and honour too, since their decisions have confirmed that they are the protagonists of sexual equality.

Furthermore, women have some inherent advantages than men. Females are, by nature, careful and circumspective. They can complement their male colleagues' shortage thereby finishing their work perfectly. Besides, some scientists have confirmed that male-female equilibrium will make employees more happier and work more effectively due to hormone. Thus, it seems like that to balance count in women and men that is a positive social development.

However, women are always hardly competent to some occupational areas. For instance, women have insufficient strength to adjust themselves to take heavy physical labour. If such factories employ women as men's count, the consequence might be unacceptable. But as technology is developing rapidly nowadays, there will be more labour-saving and labour-replacing machinery in the future. At that time, companies keep a equal number of female and male employees would become reality.

Summarily, because reasons I mentioned above, I believe that to balance number of female and male employees is a positive social development.

shan8006

原帖由 neverfree 于 16-1-2011 14:53 发表
eg.1 in order for more people to benefit from the education, be it completing higher education 这里的be it completing...是什么个用法？
这个好像是倒装句， it should be 改成了  should be it ,  然后 should 省略了

eg.2 those who are willing to persuade a post graduate studies or start career in academia for which wild range of knowledge might be an asset. 这里的for which可不可以这样用？
knowledge might be an asset for which（which指代前面整个句子，那些想要读研或在学院教书人，这种情况下），然后 for which 提前
另外，persuade可以这么用吗? 我怎么觉得应该用 pursue，  还有 为何是 a postgraduate studies， start career 为何不是 start careers ?

eg1，经你这么一说，好像是的。

eg2，看上去很复杂的说。。。。

icewd

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我也不是很确定，试着回答下。

eg.1 in order for more people to benefit from the education, be it completing higher education 这里的be it completing...是什么个用法？
这个好像是倒装句， it should be  ...
eg.2 those who are willing to persuade a post graduate studies or start career in academia for which wild range of knowledge might be an asset. 这里的for which可不可以这样用？
knowledge might be an asset for which（which指代前面整个句子，那些想要读研或在学院教书人，这种情况下），然后 for which 提前
另外，persuade可以这么用吗? 我怎么觉得应该用 pursue，  还有 为何是 a postgraduate studies， start career 为何不是 start careers ?

感谢，你说得对哈，是用pursue，后面都用复数表示。
另外，如果是it should be的倒装，难道不是should it be吗？

shan8006

The twenty-ninth essay 1月15日考试G类大作文

Today, in many countries, people hold bigger and more expensive weddings than before.  What's your opinion about it? Do you agree or disagree?

Answer:

Currently, people's weddings have become bigger and more expensive than before. In my view, I agree that people spend more money to hold bigger weddings, as consumption are increasingly costly in this day and age; and gorgeous weddings are always play an important role in people's lives.

People always wish that their weddings are only once in their lives and must be brilliant. In particular ladies, holding gorgeous weddings in the future are their beautiful dreams since their childhood. As well as gentlemen, they hope to marry their love ones at perfect weddings thereby expressing loyalties to their brides. Besides, because of world peace and global development, people have been wealthy than before much more. More precisely, they have rights and abilities to fulfil their dreams.

However, some people argue that spending too much money on wedding is a sort of waste. Normally, new couples always have a lot of work to do when they incipiently live together. They must make a concerted effort to build their love nests but those need much money. Holding expensive and bigger wedding certainly spend their important money to fantastic activities instead of real lives. That is why some new couples choose simple wedding or destination wedding for the sake of saving money to build their love nests.

Finally, undoubtedly, costly price of commodities nowadays lead wedding expenditure skyrocket. In other words, the prices of wedding necessities such as renting wedding cars, floriations and wedding feasts have risen. As a result, that cause wedding costs more than before and will continue to rise.

Summarily, it is a trend that people hold their wedding more costly and bigger, because of high prices of commodities, new couples have to choose expansive wedding to realise their dreams. But on the other hand, some realistic couples choose to save their important money for the sake of building their love nests. In my opinion, I prefer to realise my dream, because money can be gain via efforts but wedding just once.

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