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xiaoping410

shan同学真是言而有信，精神可贵，让人很受鼓舞啊

crystali99

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shan同学真是言而有信，精神可贵，让人很受鼓舞啊

赞同！有这种精神不怕啃不下雅思这块硬骨头！我已经把shan同学的帖子发给我家老公学习了！

sevennior

哎，我都说要复习，可是今天拖明天，明天托后天，眼看过年了。咋就没点恒心呢。。。跟楼主简直没法比

xiaojia

楼上的分数已经不错了。

sevennior

原帖由 xiaojia 于 28-12-2010 01:40 发表

                               
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楼上的分数已经不错了。

离目标还差远了啊

shan8006

原帖由 xiaoping410 于 28-12-2010 00:54 发表

                               
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shan同学真是言而有信，精神可贵，让人很受鼓舞啊

其实吧，在发个帖子时我就把自己顶在杠头上了。就因为我知道只有如此才能逼着我每天复习。呵呵，多谢夸奖

shan8006

原帖由 crystali99 于 28-12-2010 01:19 发表

                               
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赞同！有这种精神不怕啃不下雅思这块硬骨头！我已经把shan同学的帖子发给我家老公学习了！

呵呵，真羡慕啊，有茉莉姐这样好的英文，你老公既不用找老师，口语也不缺练习对象了。

shan8006

原帖由 sevennior 于 28-12-2010 01:30 发表

                               
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哎，我都说要复习，可是今天拖明天，明天托后天，眼看过年了。咋就没点恒心呢。。。跟楼主简直没法比

提个建议，可以跟我学啊，让大家来鞭策自己。
自从被雅思逼成了神经病，整个人感觉精神多了。

shan8006

The tenth essay

Some people argue that young people are spending too much time on watch TV, what do you think of it? And what kinds of activities should be encouraged to them?

Answer:

Television programs have became youngsters' main entertainment in this day and age, then some people argue that they are spending overmuch time on this kind of diversion. In this essay, I will pose my own opiniont on this issue and propose some probable measures which should encouraged to them.

First and foremost, youngsters sit in front of the TV for long time would cause some health problems for them. In this sedentary lifestyle, youths would lack exercises for their physical development during the time what are the important ages for children's growth. As a result, they would be obesity or be easier to sicken. Likewise, watching TV perennially would impair juniors' vision, and there seems to be plenty of research findings to comfirm this. Furthermore, students pay excessive attention to TV would lead they cannot concentrate on their homeworks. However, juniors are also benefited from waching TV, television programs provide various contents from cuisine to current affairs, most of them are informative and entertaining. Those could expand yousters' outlook and impart knowledge which are youths cannot acquired from lecture halls. In terms of this, maybe we should allow youngsters to watch TV.

As a matter of fact, doing exercise, watching TV and doing homework are not mutually exclusive things. For the sake of improving juniors' physical qualities and avoiding optical disease, on condition that kids have finished their homeworks, parents should permit them watching TV and encourage them to do proper exercises like keep-fit and yoga when they have watched TV at most over an hour.

In summary, watching TV is not a bad thing for yousters, parents should properly arrange the priorities(watching TV, doing exercise and doing homework.) for their children.

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xiaoping410

原帖由 shan8006 于 28-12-2010 21:20 发表

                               
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呵呵，真羡慕啊，有茉莉姐这样好的英文，你老公既不用找老师，口语也不缺练习对象了。

这个分明是羡慕我们茉莉姐LG的。。。

neverfree

第10篇退步了，试着改了下，语法错误太多，逻辑问题严重
题目中的第三点提出建议一笔带过

另感觉题目未说讨论看电视的好处和坏处，而是要求讨论 是否花了太多时间，是否有点偏题？

冰天雪地，穿上棉大衣跪求高手出马 @_@
比如楼上那位兄台

[ 本帖最后由 neverfree 于 29-12-2010 01:44 编辑 ]

shan8006

原帖由 xiaoping410 于 29-12-2010 00:05 发表

                               
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这个分明是羡慕我们茉莉姐LG的。。。

再琢磨一下好像是哦，复杂句用太长了，写到后面竟然忘记主语是谁了，看来英文和中文真的是一样啊。

shan8006

原帖由 neverfree 于 29-12-2010 01:14 发表

                               
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第10篇退步了，试着改了下，语法错误太多，逻辑问题严重
题目中的第三点提出建议一笔带过

另感觉题目未说讨论看电视的好处和坏处，而是要求讨论 是否花了太多时间，是否有点偏题？

冰天雪地，穿上棉大衣跪求高 ...

这篇是尝试着改变一下以前的风格，写得很艰难。有几个观点写得有些牵强。第三点是因为感觉字数差不多了故意克制的。
谢谢这位同学那么仔细地看我的文章，如果可以的话，是否把我的语法错误指出来我好改，我实在是太渴望了。

By the way，冰天雪地，穿上棉大衣跪求。。。好像诚意上。。。。

shan8006

原帖由 neverfree 于 29-12-2010 01:14 发表

                               
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第10篇退步了，试着改了下，语法错误太多，逻辑问题严重
题目中的第三点提出建议一笔带过

另感觉题目未说讨论看电视的好处和坏处，而是要求讨论 是否花了太多时间，是否有点偏题？

冰天雪地，穿上棉大衣跪求高 ...

再看了一遍文章，不好意思，我在改作文时把字序改乱了，现在改回来。

Daibaw

给LZ个建议，考官也是人，用大词过犹不及啊。

shan8006

原帖由 Daibaw 于 29-12-2010 20:16 发表

                               
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给LZ个建议，考官也是人，用大词过犹不及啊。

555，这方面我没有概念啊。

shan8006

The eleventh essay

Many people prefer to stay the type of work all their lives and others prefer to change the type of work. Discuss and give your own opinion.

Answer:

It is not uncommon that some people change their work types frequently in this day and age, whereas another people trend to absorbed in their work types. In this essay, I will discuss both view and pose my own point.

First and foremost, to some extent, changing jobs frequently would make people happy. They would find every jobs which they gone about are fresh and different. Furthermore, they could acquire diverse experience and skills through various occupations. But on the other hand, these skills and experience can not make them become experts. Because of changes, they cannot accumulate sufficient experience and techniques from their various careers. As a consequence, they would never get a decent promotion as they are lack of loyalty to their companies, and even difficult for finding a decent vocation but sorts of jobs which do not necessitate experience and skills.

By contrast, even though people who are absorbed in their careers would be enduring humdrum routine work. At the same time, they are accumulating professional skills and experience as well. As a result, they would become the experts in their vocational areas and earn not only enviable salaries but also the honour from their occupational success. Besides, they also have chances to gain promotion because of their techniques and the loyalty to their enterprises. Additionally, they would live in serenity and stability, whereas people who frequently change their jobs would live in quandaries between unemployment and new jobs

All in all, I believe, people concentrate on their careers would have chances to achieve occupational success, whereas frequently changing job would never manage to reach a comparable level.

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neverfree

第一段里 which should （be）encouraged to them.

youngsters sit in front of the TV for long time would cause some health problems for them.
students pay excessive attention to TV would lead...
这2句主语貌似有问题，

plenty of research findings to(这里是否该用that) confirm this

knowledge which are(是否该删掉) youths cannot acquired(acquire)

还有probable measures 貌似不大对啊，google搜不到这种用法

另外sedentary lifestyle 似乎是个好词啊 学习了，不过后面跟的句子让我很纠结

我是边字典边谷歌来看的，顺便推荐个网站
http : // www.ielts-blog.com/category/ielt ... ielts-essays-band-5 /
里面有作文修改的批示，挺好的

shan8006

首先感谢楼上TX花了那么长时间来看我的文章。

第一段里 which should （be）encouraged to them.
555，我一定牢记错误，痛改前非。

youngsters sit in front of the TV for long time would cause some health problems for them.
students pay excessive attention to TV would lead...
这2句主语貌似有问题，
这个我也不确定，等哪位高手来看看。目前也正在抓紧类似方面的改进。

plenty of research findings to(这里是否该用that) confirm this
这个我确定是这样写的，因为这是十天作文里的高分句型，原本怀疑背错了，刚刚又翻了一下没有错。

knowledge which are(是否该删掉) youths cannot acquired(acquire)
这段我纠结了挺久，就是为这个are加不加，以前我都是不加的，看语法书上说宾补，就是把which代成前面你要修饰的那个宾语，然后句子成立。
例如I have an apple which was got from my mother.把which代成修饰的an apple变成 An apple was got from my mother,句子成立。

还有probable measures 貌似不大对啊，google搜不到这种用法
我也搜了下，probable action有，measure和action可以互相替代。这里用probable是因为想客气一点，留些余地。

另外sedentary lifestyle 似乎是个好词啊 学习了，不过后面跟的句子让我很纠结
这个字也是十天里的高分词汇，意思是缺少运动的生活方式。

我是边字典边谷歌来看的，顺便推荐个网站
http : // www.ielts-blog.com/category/ielt ... ielts-essays-band-5 /
里面有作文修改的批示，挺好的
呵呵，收藏了。

shan8006

这样吧，我把十天的写作必背词汇和高分词汇都已经做成txt文件了，方便PSP和手机看啊。我现在把它共享上来（不许检举我啊。。。 ） NSV-full.txt (44.98 KB, 下载次数: 11)

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点击文件名下载附件
by the way 有谁猜出文件里开头的:
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有什么用，有奖！

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shan8006

The twelfth essay

Someone think children should attend extra classes after school, others disagree. Discuss both opinion and give your own view.

Answer:

Parents and educational institutions have paid much attention to studengts' education in this day and age. Some people claim kids should enter for extracurriculum class after school, but others do not think so. In this essay, I will discuss both view and pose my own opinion.

No doubt that, Kids receive various education would be beneficial to them, they would acquire diverse knowledge and become versatile. Of course, every parents are keen to anticipate their children well-rounded. "Don't let your child fail at the starting point ", that has become a motto that claimed by the most of parents. Therefore, they think it is insufficient that children just received education from schooling. Instead, they send their kids to attend extracurriculum class after school. Parents deem they are right, the reason is simple, kids acquire sufficient knowledge that would help them to confront the fierce competition in the future.

However, excessive education would put enormous pressure on children. As we know, Children are naturally playful and innocent, they have strong imagination and creativity by nature and developing those through play. these abilities are important to children's future and could be limitedly acquired through schooling as well. Whereas, extra classes would deprive their time to play, because they have lots of work to do after really finish class such as scholastic homeworks and extra homeworks. In the course of time, kids would lack of creativity and imagination but an abundance of academic knowledge. That is why other parents claim "return the innocence back to the children".

Summarily, In my opinion, children should study hard in school and play to the top of their bent after school.

shan8006

The thirteenth essay

Do you think people going abroad for study or work for one or two years should bring their families with them?

Answer:

As there are increasing numbers of people study or work abroad in this day and age, whether their families should accompany with them if they just go abroad for one or two years or not. That has become a topic of discussion. In my view, I agree with that household members should be together whatever going abroad for long-term or short-term.

First and foremost, people go abroad with their families that whould not only maintain the family bonds but also give them motivation to hold firmly to their work or study. Persons are naturally homesick, in particular at strange places. They would miss their family when they have worked or studied for a period of time, and vice versa. Subsequently, homesickness would frustrate the people and cause their work or study less efficient; even, strong homesickness is a main cause of that people abnegate their enterprise abroad and go back to their countries. In contrast, people with their families abroad would encourage them to fight for their ideality and their families during this hard period.

However, Some negative effects occur when family members go with these people at the first part of the period of time. First of all, The language is the biggest problem for their families, they would just have one thing to do at first —— learn new language. particularly, children they brought could not come up with their peers' study as they have to study language first. Similarly, wives or husbands could not adjust themselves to the new cities but only learn new language. Furthermore, they leave their friends, relatives and acquaintances away and place themselves to the strange places. Whereas, just because of these, after the adaptive phase, they would really know if these new places are adapted to them and get choices whether going back to hometown or migrating to this new country.

All in all, people go abroad with their family could stimulate them, and through the hard adaptive phase they could find whether these new countries are really adapted to them.

晕，好像感觉作文越写越长了。。。刻意为控制字数急刹车。

crystali99

闪动兄弟，2011快到了，来你帖子看看，祝新年快乐，雅思全7！

羽天十三

这样坚持半年的话，何止4个7，4个8也不成问题的。
最主要还是在坚持 。

shan8006

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闪动兄弟，2011快到了，来你帖子看看，祝新年快乐，雅思全7！

茉莉姐，祝你一切顺利。。。

shan8006

原帖由 羽天十三 于 1-1-2011 07:21 发表

                               
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这样坚持半年的话，何止4个7，4个8也不成问题的。
最主要还是在坚持 。

4个7我就。。。8我也不想了。若是让我去国外实习个两年我还敢干他一下。

shan8006

The fourteenth is letter

You have applied a course to a collage in Australia, but you still have not received the reply. Write a letter to state.
1.The details of the course;
2.Why you choose the course;
3.Why you need the reply soon.

Answer:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Writing this letter because I was wondering if you could give me response about the English course which I had applied last three months.

As I known on the Internet, your collage provide an Accelerated English Course. It takes three months as a term and has class every workdays' nights. I'm oversea now and will arrive Australia about next month. As you know, the newcomers have lots of work to do such as renting house, finding work and something like that. Therefore, this course's schedule is plenty suit me, as I could do my business at day and have class at night.

While I haven't receive your response yet, although I had applied this course lasting three months. I'm so worry about that, because the day I'll go to Austrilia is increasingly near. Provided that you have send reply to me that maybe means it has lost, please send it to me again.

I'm looking forward to receive your reply soon and thanks for your help in advance.

your sincerely,
Jason Lee

今天很不开心，茉莉姐走了，对我来说是损失了一位老师，但换句话来说其实也是一种打击，即努力并不一定就有回报，纠结啊。。。不是为了雅思，可能是人生，或是将来所要面对的。不管了，想太多了，先把鸭子搞定再说！

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shan8006

祝各位TX新年快乐^_^

shan8006

在新年里，送给TX们一个礼物，不是什么好东西，G类雅思历届考试题目。我自己在其他网站上收集的，压缩在一起了，希望对大家有帮助。
没想到附件太大，抱歉大家分卷下载吧。
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narcsity

shan是个奋进的好TX。
OK ,there we go.
Let's spare no effort in preparing IELTS !