第一篇雅思小作文,求大家点评

Sean2007

今天花20分钟,写下了平生第一篇雅思小作文,题目就是剑7 test 1,评论5个国家的消费支出情况。心里没底，大家给点意见吧，尤其是那些雅思高人，拉兄弟一把吧。

Following is my writing:

Here is the table that reflect consumer spending on Food/drink/tabacco, clothing/footwear and leisure/education in following five countries: Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Tureky in 2002.

For all countries spending on food/drink/tobacco is the main cost of life and major spending item. In Italy and Turkey, the percents are near 30%. In other three countries, they all are below 20% and Sweden is the lowest one with only 15.77%, only half of the Turkey which is 32.14%.

Spending on clothes in all five countries are below 10%. Italian spend more on this kind of item which is 9%. Sweden spent least on it with only 5.4%. The other three contries all spend around 6.5% on this item.

For Leisure/education, the spending of there countries all are below 5%. People in Turkey spent 4.35% of their spending on it, which is highest in all five countries in contrast to Spanish people who only spent 1.98% on it. Italy and Sweden spending are almost same, Italy is 3.2% while Sweden is 3.22%.

In Summary, the spending on food/drink/tabacco is the most important cost for all five countries. And it seems Italy spend much on clothing while Turkey pay more attention to leisure and education!

wolf

图表题看不出水平 来一篇大作文是硬道理