Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter
• explain why you changed jobs
• describe your new job
• tell him/her your other news
Write about 150 words
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letters as follows:
Dear ………………..,
Dear Sam,
I’m wiring to you to tell you that I have recently started work in a new company, Cisco Systems, Inc., which is one of the most famous telecommunication companies all over the world. You may be curious about why I left my previous employer Intel. The reason is that I prefer Cisco to Intel, and what’s more, I’ve been a fan of Cisco technologies since I was young.
During these days, I have been enjoying the days working at Cisco. I’ve got a number of racks of devices. I just configure them and set up a working telecommunication network. Furthermore, the working time is very flexible, so I can get up late everyday. And the most important thing is that the pay is much higher than the job before.
Finally, I should tell you that I’m preparing for the CCIE (Cisco Certified Internetworking Expert) certificate, which is the top certificate on the networking area. It was expensive for me to take the example before but now I can take it for free!
Looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours
Sean
Writing Task 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment.
Are there more advantages than disadvantages than of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?
Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
Live in House or An apartment
With the development of real estate market, more and more choices of housing are faced with consumers. Take Shanghai for example, all citizens lived in apartments several decades ago. But after the 1990s, more and more houses have been developed by real estate companies, in order to meet the requirement of high level consumers. Living in house or an apartment, it’s now a choice for citizens of large cities.
Living in a house is a good decision for successful people. There are several advantages. First of all, houses are always built in the uptown areas, where livers can enjoy fresher air, which is good for health. Furthermore, more space for living make people relax better, and they can hold whatever activities they want, such as part and sport. Last but not the least, it’s a good way of investment to buy a high-qualified house, for the owner of the house can enjoy profit brought by the development of the city.
On the other hand, to live in an apartment is a better choice for us young citizens of a city. First, it’s tough to afford the high load of buying a house. Second, the apartments are usually built in downtown where is usually nearer to the working place. Finally, apartments are always narrow so that you don’t need too much effort and expense to clean.
All in all, living in house is a good suggestion for rich people. But for youth, whether it’s a blessing or a curse depends on whether they can afford such a high expense.
尽量少用I开头
During these days, I have been enjoying the days working at Cisco. I’ve got a number of racks of devices. I just configure them and set up a working telecommunication network.
比如这里就连续3各I 不太好
I’m wiring to you to tell you that I have recently started working in a new company, Cisco Systems, Inc., which is one of the most famous telecommunication companies in the world. You may be curious about why I left my previous employer Intel. The reason is that I prefer Cisco over Intel because of the former's constant pursuit of innovation in technology. And what’s more, I’ve been a fan of Cisco technologies since I was young.
举个例子： 第一篇：“The reason is that I prefer Cisco to Intel, and what’s more, I’ve been a fan of Cisco technologies since I was young.” 前半句话跟没说一样。要不就是语言不清晰造成误解。LZ 是不是想说： The reason that I prefer Cisco to Intel, is that....
第二篇：decision 这里用法不当。
more space for living "makes"
句子过分冗长，而且容易产生语法问题。第二段。。第二句，没必要最后使用第三重的从句，看起来别扭。直接 写 “and this condition is good for health.” 还是第二段
“ part ” 是拼写错误吗？
第二段。。最后一句。。同样是，句子过长，并且在从句中有明显语法错误。 还有 “high-qualified ” 用词不当。意思是 有本领的，够资格的。这里形容 property 显然别扭。
其他问题就不一一举例了。。希望LZ 能够努力自己找出自己语法和用词问题。将来考试一举成功。作者: mgdhy 时间: 23-11-2009 15:04
楼主的那个 I have recently started working ... 并没有语法错误。
start doing sth.和start to do sth. 的意义有很大区别。start doing sth.表示延续意义，用在完成时很恰当。
如果论点无新意，有明显的模板格式，老掉牙的句子多：开头With the development of economy……要么就是More and more people……动不动就“As a result”没完没了地用，通遍一大堆“In my opinion”，“I think”，“There be”句型，这种东西唬弄唬弄四六级也就算了，拿来糊弄GZ，未免有点自讨没趣了。这样的就是5分的固定模式。
I’m wiring （writing) to you to tell you (I am writing to tell you that) that I have recently started work in a new company, Cisco Systems, Inc., which is one of the most famous telecommunication companies all over the world. You may be curious about why I left my previous employer Intel. The reason is that I prefer Cisco to Intel, and what’s more, I’ve been a fan of Cisco technologies since I was young.
1.非正式信件最好以礼貌性用语开场。
2.have started a new job in ....... 如果一定要用work，最好是 I have recently started working in...........
3.最后一句逻辑不清，切忌为了达到写作要求而搪塞。
During these days, I have been enjoying the days working at Cisco. I’ve got a number of racks of devices. I just configure them and set up a working telecommunication network. Furthermore, the working time is very flexible, so I can get up late everyday. And the most important thing is that the pay is much higher than the job before.
1.需要用适当的连接词，而不是以during these days来开头。另外，during these days,.......days wokring.........days 重复
2.量词，一个就够了，a number of deveices or racks of devieces
3.remove "just"，太口语化
4.如果整段是写你为什么enjoy working at Cisco,第二、三句要做适当的调整。
Finally, I should tell you that I’m preparing for the CCIE (Cisco Certified Internetworking Expert) certificate, which is the top certificate on the networking area. It was expensive for me to take the example before but now I can take it for free!
1.remove“I should tell you that"直接写你在做什么，即使是中文也没有什么“我应该告诉你。。。。”这种写法吧。
Looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours，
Sean
Live in House or An apartment（雅思写作不要求标题）
（没有应题，即，address the questions. 但注意只是把题目内容抄一遍是会被扣分的。250字的文章最好用大概50字来应题，写写background等）
With the development of real estate market, more and more choices ofhousing are faced with consumers. Take Shanghai for example, allcitizens lived in apartments several decades ago. But after the 1990s,more and more houses have been developed by real estate companies, inorder to meet the requirement of high level consumers. Living in houseor an apartment, it’s now a choice for citizens of large cities.
1.语意不清，结构上需要调整。另外，最好先表明观点，即先答题。 人家问advantages and disadvantages, 以上这段看不出来。
2.第一句：......choices.....are faced with consumers. 应以consumers来做主语
3.Take Shanghai for example, 太口语化: For example, .........
4.正式写作忌以but, and做句子开头
5. more and more重复出现
6. 语句不是很通顺（以下愚作乃根据原文所改，但不建议以此作为开头段，只做参考而已）
With developments of the real estate market, consumers have more choices in selecting their preferred type of housing. For example, before the 1990s when the housing market in Shanghai started to develop, apartments were the only type of housing available for the residents. However, after the 1990s, houses were introduced to the market by various real estate companies and have attracted a large amount of consumers since then. Today, consumers in populated cities can choose either apartments or houses as their preferred type of housing.
Living in a house is a good decision for successful people. There areseveral advantages. First of all, houses are always built in the uptownareas, where livers can enjoy fresher air, which is good for health.Furthermore, more space for living make people relax better, and theycan hold whatever activities they want, such as part and sport. Lastbut not the least, it’s a good way of investment to buy ahigh-qualified house, for the owner of the house can enjoy profitbrought by the development of the city.
1.第一句不应题
2.livers?谁的肝啊？-->residents. 另外，如非必要，不要从句里再从句。
3.不要随便用last but not the least。 这是一般在文章结尾用的。
4.需要调整结构。
On the other hand, to live in an apartment is a better choice for usyoung citizens of a city. First, it’s tough to afford the high load ofbuying a house. Second, the apartments are usually built in downtownwhere is usually nearer to the working place. Finally, apartments arealways narrow so that you don’t need too much effort and expense toclean.
All in all, living in house is a good suggestion for rich people. Butfor youth, whether it’s a blessing or a curse depends on whether theycan afford such a high expense.
1.假如写house那段的结构整理好了，这段用on the other hand，开头做比较是可以的。
2.for us young citizens of a city ----> for your residents. citizen是公民，resident是居民，住在一个地方的人不一定都是那个国家的公民，特别在讨论居住时，resident 比较合适。
3.既然已经讲是young residents,后面就要捉住young来讨论，不要过于笼统， 后面的论证改一改就可以支撑开头句了。
4.load --> loan
5.nearer-->near 就够了
6.narrow--> apartments have smaller space
7.All in all--> In all
8.结论最好另起一段。另外，有没有钱住house并不是人家要问的，据以上原文，住house的一个advantage是可以突出自己有钱。这样的论点考官可能不太接受吧。
9. 还是文章结构需要改善。 基本上只有在罗列论证，语句不是很连贯。
作者: hxuanyu 时间: 23-11-2009 18:36
Dear Sam,
I’m wiring to you to tell (writing to you to tell you肯定不合适 是否可以用 writing to tell you) that I have recently started work (start work 肯定不对)in a new company, Cisco Systems, Inc., which is one of the most famous telecommunication companies all over the world. You may be curious about why I left my previous employer Intel. The reason is that I prefer Cisco to Intel, and what’s more, I’ve been a fan of Cisco technologies since I was young.
我是把lz的作文考到 outlook里修改的，说实话，当我看到， you may be xxx的时候，我搞不清楚这是一片什么文章，主旨是什么。
我觉得这种信件应该是一看就懂，很清楚的东西，或者可以改成这样
I am wrting to xxx I haved quited current company and joined xxxx. 第一段就这么一句话
During these days, I have been enjoying the days working at Cisco. I’ve got a number of racks of devices. I just configure them and set up a working telecommunication network. Furthermore, the working time is very flexible, so I can get up late everyday. And the most important thing is that the pay is much higher than the job before.
第一句很不好，两遍 during these days... 随便谁读起来都会感觉别扭。
你可以说，I really enjoy my new xxx in csico, during which time/where I can/'ve ...
Finally, I should tell you that I’m preparing for the CCIE (Cisco Certified Internetworking Expert) certificate, which is the top certificate on the networking area. It was expensive for me to take the example before but now I can take it for free!
It has been a while since we last met. How are you these days? I hope you are well.
I recently accepted a position offered by Cisco Systems as Test Engineer. As you may be aware, Cisco is a leading giant in global telecommunication industry. Are you a bit curious about my resignation from Intel? Frankly speaking, I gained valuable experience in the past 3 years. However, repetitive work really made me sick and pushed/motivated me to look for new opportunities.
Working at Cisco is really enjoyable. Not only I have a bunch of new devices to play with, but our working hours are also quite flexible. So now I can pick up my kids after work. And yes, I am paid way better than before as you would have imagined.
？-->residents. 另外，如非必要，不要从句里再从句。