贴篇作文，请高手指教

sally0513

题目要求：Writer a short passage to express your own viewpoint on a young man who write Beckham's name on his forehead and wears the same hairstyle as his,your writing should include:
1, idlo worship is prevalent among the youth
2,Give another example
3,Your viewpoint

  During recent years, There is an intresting phenomenon that there were youngsters who wrote Beckham's name on their forehead and wore the same hairstyle as his. The time of idol worship becomes. For one thing, when we are in the shopping malls, we can find many designs of idol were being painted on the T'shirt. For another, many young people wear the same clothes as their idol's and sing the same songs which are brought by pop idols. Furthmore, more and more programes are in Tv interview such as Supergirls, imitation Show and so on.

   For my part, the phenomenons that idol worship is prevalent among the younth is quite Understandable and I think that almost everyone has his idol. Lots of idol own the perfect capability, so they are worshipped by young people who easily accept the new thins. In a certain degree, idol worship can also give younth power and encourage them to accomplish their dreams. Certainly, simple imitation such as only pursuing fashions or hairstyles would waste youngth time and reduce the efficency of work. So we should learn the postive part from our idol, not the skin-deep part.
小弟英语很烂，特像高手请教，在此小弟谢谢各位了！

ferres

貌似没写完吧
大体思路对啊 好处坏处分两段写吧
6分应该有

sally0513

呵呵，其实我已经写完了，只能写出这点来，谢谢2楼的朋友

wolf

太强悍了。 楼上的考官给你6分。楼主，咋一看，偶以为你是在写PART1的作文。如果偶是考官，偶给你9分。前提是偶决定放你一马。

sally0513

看来我还要狠下功夫哦

cnnworld

坦白说，我写作很烂，也算不上经验，但也算过线了，雅思考试前熟悉了下题型，觉得就写作可能不过，于是看了几个模板，总结了下经验，后来写作反正6.5，高于我期望值，写点感受：

1.  通常写作要四段，第一段第一句第二句就是用自己的语句把题目重复一遍，第三第四句强调观点。后面的每段第一句要么是中心句，要么是有承上启下作用的句子，总之，这样的句型记忆下，有个5句的储备就够了。

2. 第二段正说，第三段递进说，第四段反说或者强调观点或者实力，记忆几个递进的句子就够了

3. 最后段最容易找模板，找几个经典句子凑字数，通常有了5段也差不多够字数了

反正我就准备了几个小时，总共，最后混了个6.5

sally0513

恩，谢谢楼上的朋友，我现在学雅思最大的障碍在于根本没有时间。唉~